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#1  2008-06-07 07:04:18

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[quote]hi everyone i just like to share wat i've written for the past years this is my first story dat i wrote hope u will give a comment... :)[/quote] [img]http://i280.photobucket.com/albums/kk185/pr

[quote]hi everyone i just like to share wat i've written for the past years this is my first story dat i wrote hope u will give a comment... :)[/quote] [img]http://i280.photobucket.com/albums/kk185/princessteenage/love47.jpg[/img] [align=center]destiny there were two friends.having a close relationship.they will go to school together and doing assignments also... they are so happy everyday... years passed by they are already second yr high school.as expected all girls can feel the emotions to love a person.they are CHELSEA and ABEGAIL.their story starts like this..... it was the their first day of school in PHU or the philippine hopkins university.CHELSEA and ABEGAIL used to go together everyday when they have classes.they start their first day... without experiencing to be late.it was their first time to be in the school early.they saw BRANDON.... and he said"early birds ha!"... but the two girls admit that it is their first time being an early bird... but ABEGAIL is too curious of the bag he saw beside the chair of BRANDON... who owns that bag? [/align] :o hope u dun mind to read this... [quote]gve some comments or some suggestions about my story.. ok2?!? :paranoid:[/quote]

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#2  2008-06-10 08:15:49

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Hmm..looks cool :] where's the next part! :)
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#3  2008-06-13 09:32:02

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[align=center]as they were talking.ABEGAIL observe the bag beside the chair of BRANDON.she told BRANDON that "who owns that bag BRANDON?" it the bag of TORIN... the bestfriend of BRANDON... After their flag ceremony... they had the three periods... to have a class.. after that they had their LUNCH BREAK. in the canteen.. Abegail with Chelsea saw Brandon with a guy... Abegail is just wondering if that guy is the one who owns the bag.... and then... Brandon saw them too... in that time... Abegail and Torin meet at last!!!! they are good friends... since they met... first day of the month they had their project already and that is making a musical presentation... they discuss and create some effects on their presentation... Abegail and Chelsea is still good friends... sometimes Abegail slept at the house of Chelsea... in that time they talk about Torin... Abegail said"he's good in all subjects" Chelsea smiled to Abegail and told her that"how did u know?" then Abegail admit to Chelsea that she feels the LOVE AT FIRST SIGHT... [/align] [quote]hope u will lyk 8 guyz! ahihi have a tym to read of my story... :)[/quote]
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#4  2008-06-14 13:32:11

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then?!. is that all?!. is there a next chapter?!. well. btw. ur story is nice!. i lyk it!. and kip it up!. hope more commentors here!
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#5  2008-06-14 18:54:29

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weew!, nice2!,:thumbsup:. nxt chappie plzs???. jiji:D
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#6  2008-06-14 23:28:08

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[b]thanks for the comments guys i do appreciate dat u read my story :D[/b] [align=center]on that day also... Brandon and Torin talked about Abegail and Chelsea.. Torin asked to Brandon if he had a crush to Abegail.. but Brandon likes Chelsea... he had a crush on Chelsea since elementary... and he like to court her..but he's afraid to do it.. So Torin helped him in doing that they went to a mall and buy something for Chelsea...on the next day,the students in PHU have a culminating activity after that... Torin told Chelsea that he had a surprise for her... surprisingly!!! Chelsea saw Brandon having a stuff toy and flowers too... Brandon said "Can you be my girlfriend?"... Chelsea is so shock in that moment and she answered "Ah!!! Can you give me three days to think.It is so unexpected.I thought you admired to the sister of Abegail. Brandon deny it and told her "No!!! I love you Chelsea with all my heart..." uhhhmmmzz...... what is the answer of Chelsea to Brandon? is it yes or no? nyahahahahahahaha......... [/align]
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#7  2008-06-16 09:56:35

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i think it's no!., haha., lol., but even she answer no!., there will be always a happy ending!., am i ryt?!., haha., ur stoorrryyy iiisss ssssssoooooo nice!., i love it!., i can't w8 for the next chappie!., hope more commentors here in ur thread. kip seyp and hope u make more stories!
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#8  2008-06-18 06:49:02

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gooh! brandon and chelsea!, i will support the 4 the two of you!, jiji:D.., ~nxt chappie!, and your story is nice!:thumbsup: kip it up! =)
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#9  2008-06-18 07:52:31

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[quote]woot! :O ahihi well thanks for the comments i really appreciate that you have time to read it![/quote] after three days... Abegail and Chelsea go together to the school. Chelsea is ready to her answer to Brandon. While on there way... Abegail,"Oh there he is!!! Hi Brandon and Torin!!!" and Torin laughed and remembering the promise of Chelsea to Brandon... Chelsea and Brandon go to the Canteen to talk.. in the canteen.. Brandon,"Do you know already you answer?" and Chelsea answered... "ahmmm... yes..." Brandon jumped for joy and said "wohoooo!!!!" While Abegail and Torin are alone in hallway... Abegail asked for a treat to Torin to go to the mall and Torin accept the request... they went to the mall and spent their time... with laughetrs... while they are in the mall... Torin,"Do you have your ideal guy?" Abegail smiled and asnwered "I have of course. Every girl in this world has an ideal guy to be with them forever." Abegail told Torin about it... While they are talking Abegail stepped on a scattered toys in the childrens center of the mall.. Abegail fell.. but Torin saved her... They go home by riding a taxi while they are already in the house... Abegail,"I hope next time we could do the same thing" Torin smiled to Abegail and said "Yes,I enjoyed to be with you..."
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#10  2008-06-24 07:17:19

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on the next day... Abegail is late again... after their on period of their class... Chelsea told to Abegail "Abegail!!!,you will do that again being a latecomer?huh?"........... Abegail is laughing to Chelsea..... Abegail answered "Last night,I'm with Torin... we shop and enjoyed ourselves in the mall.We go home at 9 pm ang I slept already at 10 pm.That's why I'm late!!!Sorry...." Abegail tried to be not a latecomer instead she got the award of being punctual... Chelsea and Brandon already celebrated their first year anniversary... While Torin and Abegail are good friends.... On the last month which is march,Torin obesreved that Abegail has change something... Torin said "Abegail you look pale"... Abegail is shock and said... "aM I"... Days passed by Abegail turns paler and paler. Torin always... said to her that they need to go to the clinic... but Abegail insisted that she don't like to go... While in the house of Abegail's family..... Mr. Wolfen and Ms. Wolfen talked abou their daughter... about the health of Abegail..... had a disease or what???? is she have a danger to her life???????
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#11  2008-06-25 06:46:30

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^ohh! what happens to her??? wat da!, nxt chappie please?? :D
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#12  2008-06-25 06:59:43

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the continuation..... on that moment... Mr. Wolfen and Ms. Wolfen.. talked about the heart failure of Abegail... they just wonder to Abegail's health if she's still ok... and they are not sure if the heart failure of Abegail will go back....... Abegail just heard the conversation... Abegail asked if she have the heart failure... and her parents admit it... and they requested to Abegail to have a check up to Dr. Johnsons..... Well, Abegail liked to know if she have it... so she like to have a check up... For on saturday,Abegail with his parents had gone to Dr. Johnsons to have a check up for Abegail. They examined it carefully and full of tense of knowing what is the result.... Until... Dr. Johnsons got the result and said... "It's been years tat you didn't gone here,Mr. Wolfen.Your daughter has a heart failure this disease must be treated immediately.That cause her to breath heavily" Ms. Wolfen cried and also Abegail... Every after her class she go with her parents to Dr. Johnsons to have a check up in her health. Torin noriced already what she always did after their dismissal time... Until one day.... Venice said to Abegail "Abegail you don't need to absent because this is our last day to finalize our musical presentation" but Abegail insist to be abesnt... while they are talking... Chelsea interrupt and talked Abegail in private... She requested Abegail to be with them even in this time also.... they need to go to Ricky's house to have a practice... and sleep their also.... So, Abegail asked permission to her parents.... in the house of Ricky... they practice and record some sound effets in their presentation.... they ate dinner and have some good sleep.....
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#13  2008-06-27 11:50:21

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haha.. what will gonna happen to abegail?!., will she die?!., tsk.tsk... next chappie plzs. sis!., hehe. ur story is interesting!., i lyk it!., make more sis!., go for it!., i'll support you!., take care always and hope that more readers and commentors here in ur thread~!
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#14  2008-06-28 00:47:55

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the next morning it is a day with full of tension because this is their RECOGNITION DAY together having a musical presentation. They already wear their color and beautiful costumes.While their parents are going to there school. in the backstage... Mr. Drix told them "As a class adviser in this room so that you will know that you should be ready already, because you are the first one who will present a musical presentation" they are too excited already to present.... Chelsea,Torin,Brandon and Abegail perform a muscial presentation in a graceful way.... Until they are finish performing they receive a happy faces in their audience.After that.... The teacher announce already the honors Chelsea is the 6th honor while brandon is the 7th honor... torin is the 2nd honor and their 1st honor is Abegail... In the recognition day all the parents with their children are enjoying but their will be happening that they didn't expect.....
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weeeeeh!, what happened next?!., tsk2. sis it's xo bitin!., tsk.stk.. kainis!, excite pah naman aqouh!., but it's ok.. maybe because ur bz!. hehe... more powers sis!., hmm... curios aqouh!., what happened?., HMMM..
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Chelsea and Abegail went to their chapel and thanked God of what they received... Chelsea went out and waited Abegail outside of the chapel.... Torin came and they heared suddenly a loud bang of a chair... Torin,"what's that?"... Chelsea is shock and said "It's coming from inside of the chapel... They go inside and saw Abegail in the floor... They called Brandon for help..... They went back and trying to wake up Abegail... and happily Abegail stand up and told them "Hey! Don't be too nervous, I'm ok. I just fell asleep while i'm praying"........ Torin is shock and answered Abegail"you just bring us to death!!!" After their recognition day each student is having a summer classes to enhance their talents while they have a summer vacation. Brandon and Torin take Aikido class while Abegail is trying to study how to play the flute and recorder. While Chelsea has an art class.......... in Abegail's house... Abegail,"Mom i feel dizzy.."... Her mom gave her a capsule to avoid fainting... they need to go to Dr. Johnsons Hospital... while they are going to the Dr. johnsons hospital they saw Chelsea,Torin and Brandon... Chelsea,"Did you see that?"...... Torin saw and answered,"Yes,why?"..... Chelsea is just wondering where they're going.... in the car.... Nicole."I think Chelsea saw the car that's why they stop walking" Abegail."Are you sure?"... nicole answered yes.... in the hospital.... they had a good result in check up, but they bought expensive capsules to help Abegail to survive this pain. In her summer vacation she always went to Dr. Johnsons to check if her blood pressure is good. While Chelsea,Torin and Brandon visit the Wolfen Family at one time.... [quote]akuzet: enx sa pag basa wah ahihihi sobrang bc lang talagah ahihihihi gawa muna visual aides weh :D[/quote]
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#17  2008-07-11 12:34:35

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awh... ok sis!., i understand!. hi!2.. weeeeeh!., nu nga bvah skit ni abegail?!., hmm.. nakalimutan qouh kc ehh!. hehe
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awh... ok sis!., i understand!. hi!2.. weeeeeh!., nu nga bvah skit ni abegail?!., hmm.. nakalimutan qouh kc ehh!. hehe [b]weeeh!., sorry guyz!., na-double posting aqouh!., nagloko kc ung pc!. hehe... sorry![/b]

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[quote]alah double posting! ahihihi.. ahmz enx talagah sa pagbasa ng stowey ko wah!:D[/quote] [b]continuation...[/b] Chelsea:Is anybody in here? Nicole:You may come in.. Torin:Where is your sister? Nicole:We wil go to the.. Ms. Wolfen:Hi kids! Nice to see you.I will go upstairs and tell that you are in here. Nicole:Mom? Ms. Wolfen:Is it ok for you to wait? Chelsea:It's ok Ms. Wolfen... in the upstairs... Abegail had changed already and she is ready to go to Dr. Johnsons Hospital but her mom told her that her friends are in the living room waiting... Abegail didn't tell yet to her friends about her pain so she act actively when she go downstairs.... Brandon:Long time no see!!! Abegail... Torin:Last week we saw your car,where did you went on that time? Abegail:We are in a hurry in that time because we have an emergency meeting in our company... Chelsea:hmmm.... Abegail:What brings you here? Chelsea:We just like to see you!!! Abegail showed what she learned on her summer class.She played the song Tears in Heaven... Her friends like the music but it's a sad song... after that they rode a bike and roam around in thier village... they made the day very fun.... after that...... after that... while Chelsea and Brandon is busy playing on their bicycles... Torin:Abegail,I have something to tell you.. Abegail:What... Torin:It's between you and...me.... Abegail:continue... Torin:I... Chelsea:Abegail!Torin!Come join us.. Abegail:Let's go Torin!! Let's ride our bicycle... Torin:Ok!!! They ride their bicycles and roam again around the village... Torin:Did you enjoy? Abegail:Yes,you? Torin:I enjoyed a lot... Brandon:It's 1:00 already let's go to the school Torin.. Torin:You two go first,I will just follow the two of you.Just wait in the corner street ok? Chelsea:Ok!Have a nice day Abegail!!!See you next month... Abegail:See you too... Torin:Bye!!! Chelsea and Brandon:Bye!!! in the garden of Wolfen Family... Torin:Let's go back to what i will going to tell you last minute... Abegail:You can continue...(laughing to Torin) Torin:I just like to tell you that...hhmmm..... I LOVE YOU.... Abegail:ha? Torin:Bye!!!I need to go now!!! Abegail:Ah,ok...bye....... in the corner street... Brandon:What's up!!! Torin:I got nervous... I tell her that i love her... Brandon:What's the reaction? Torin:She's shock... Chelsea: Don't be too nervous Torin.. I think my best friend liked you... Just don't lose hope... Torin:Is that so? Chelsea:Yes,she sometimes talk about you.She said,she thinks she's in love with you.When you go to a mall together... Torin is smiling... Brandon:What a destiny!!! The four friends didn't see each other already they are so busy... in their summer class,while Abegail is trying to get better in her pain...
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