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hi everyone, this is my very first time writing a story.. criticisms, suggestions, comments are highly appreciated! im hoping you'll enjoy reading my story! [align=center][u][b]someday you'll be mine

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Re: hi everyone, this is my very first time writing a story.. criticisms, suggestions, comments are highly appreciated! im hoping you'll enjoy reading my story! [align=center][u][b]someday you'll be mine

[quote=znelc27]"Babe, ang sweet ng music, let's dance!" yakag ni Jane kay Renz.. "Sure babe, why not!" yun nga tumayo na yung dalawa para sumayaw sa hindi ko sinadya, naout of balance si Jane kasi nblock ko pla dadaanan niya! :lol: d ko talga sinadya ah.. promise![/quote] wawa nmn c jane wahahah... dpat d lng nadapa... sama q nmn weheheh,,, cguro nagpre2tend lng 2ng c renz at jane.. hMmM... to make trix jealous ?? weheheh... la lng... i cant wait 4 the update....
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[align=center][b]chapter 5[/b][/align] "Babe are you okay??" concern na tanong ni Renz kay Jane.. "Babe i'm not! :|" pasweet na sabi ni Jane kay Renz,, "Sorry Jane, I didnt mean it naman eh.. Peace!" nag-V sign pa'ko huh?? d ko naman talaga sinadya eh,, "Sorry?? Just that?? Bitch!" pasigaw na sabi sa'kin ni Jane "Jane, relax! Trixie's right, she didn't mean it!" whoah, ipinagtanggol ako ni Renz huh "Ang OA mo nam--" sasabihin sana ni Mitch kaya lang pinigilan ko na baka magkagulo pa "At kinakampihan mo pa xia huh, Renz??" pagalit na sabi ni Jane kay Renz "Jane, ano bang gusto mong gawin ni Trixie huh?" tanong ni Renz "Trixie, mag-usap tayo nang tayo lang sa labas!" sabi sa'kin ni Jane "Sure! Hindi ibig sabihin nito Jane na takot ako sa'yo, ayoko lang mabansagang palingkera! get that?" [b]PARKING LOT[/b] "I wanted to be honest with you Trixie, I don't want to see you with Renz!:mad:" "And why Jane?? Am I a threat?? Ngayon pa nga lang tayo nagkita ah.." "Maybe. Flirt ka kasi! baka matempt ang BF ko sa'yo!" "Me?? Flirt?? ha-ha-ha-.. kung ganun Jane, anong tawag mo sa sarili mo?:P" "I can see it in your eyes Trixxie that you like my man! So just back off!:mad:" "Mali ka Jane! Di ko siya gusto dahil mahal ko siay?? intiendes??;]" "Maldita ka talaga! Pwes hinding-hindi mo siya maaagaw sa'kin!" "Wala naman akong plano mang-agaw Jane eh.. Oo maldita ako! Pero hindi ko ugaling mang-agaw kahit ganu ko pa siya kamahal!" "Mabuti, nagkakaintindihan tayo! So friends??" "Hindi pa ako tapos Jane! hwag kang magsaya! gaya ng sabi mo maldita ako dibah?" "What do you mean??" "Hindi ko siya aagawin sa'yo dahil maghihintay lang ako kelan ka niya ididspatsa! :P" "Pwes, magintay ka sa wala! Malandi ka! **paaaaakk** " sabay sampal sa'kin "How dare you! **paaakk**" "Trixie, what's happening here?? bakit mo sinampal si Jane??" tanong sa'kin ni Renz, yun pa ang inabutan niya.. *hit!

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Re: hi everyone, this is my very first time writing a story.. criticisms, suggestions, comments are highly appreciated! im hoping you'll enjoy reading my story! [align=center][u][b]someday you'll be mine

waaah... update na! ganda!!!! :wow: :wow: :wow:
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taeh yn.. mgndang lban yan.. [spoiler]cguro nx nian.. lalayu xaiu c renz. nd iingtin k ni jane. hehe.[/spoiler]
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Re: hi everyone, this is my very first time writing a story.. criticisms, suggestions, comments are highly appreciated! im hoping you'll enjoy reading my story! [align=center][u][b]someday you'll be mine

haha! ng'update pa pla to. :lol: ktuwa nman. agawan. XD
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Re: hi everyone, this is my very first time writing a story.. criticisms, suggestions, comments are highly appreciated! im hoping you'll enjoy reading my story! [align=center][u][b]someday you'll be mine

i agree to this.... :arrow: It's really painful to be inlove with someone when you know he's inlove with somebody else! :cry::cry:.... i like this story...go trix!!....=)...
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guys thnx sa comments niuh.. sori if meju matagal ku naupdate.. ;) [quote=jen_hare_07]waaah... update na! ganda!!!! :wow: :wow: :wow:[/quote] [quote=xstel]taeh yn.. mgndang lban yan..[/quote] [quote=_berii.^ü]haha! ng'update pa pla to. :lol: ktuwa nman. agawan. XD[/quote] thx 4 reading mga sis! :D:D [quote=samarah_purple]i agree to this.... :arrow: It's really painful to be inlove with someone when you know he's inlove with somebody else! :cry::cry:.... i like this story...go trix!!....=)[/quote] uu ngah sis,, sakit tlaga pag ganun! =( thx nga pala sa pagbasa sis ah.. lav yah all! [align=center][b]CHAPTER 6[/b][/align] "Trixie, what's happening here?? bakit mo sinampal si Jane??" tanong sa'kin ni Renz, yun pa ang inabutan niya.. *hit! "listen Renz! siya yung unang nanampal sa'kin..:cry:" hindi ko namalayan tumulo na pala luha ko.. "Babe, nagsisnungaling yang babaeng yan, siya ung-" "SHUT up Jane.. pumasok ka muna sa kotse!:angry:" utos ni Renz kay Jane d ku alam kung galit xia o anu.. "What??? pinapapasok mo'ko sa kotse?? ganun na na lng ba yun??:evil:" "I said you shut up and go to the car NOW!:angry::angry:" "Whatever!" un nga umalis na si Jane "Trixie?? what's happening on you? May problema ka bah? huh?" "Renz, wala akong problema, hindi ako ang nauna.. Sinampal niah ko kaya sinampal ko din xia.. yun ang naabutan mo! I swear, im not lying!:cry::cry:" my knees are really shaking.. "Bakit ba?? Ano bang problema nyo Trix? bakit kailangan pa ninyong magsampalan?" sinigawan na nya 'ko "Bakit mo ba ako sinisigawan?? Huh?? :mad: gusto mong malaman kung bakit?? Gusto mo talaga??:mad:" "OO! gustung-gusto kong mala-" "I LOVE YOU Renz!! Yan ang dahilan bakit ako nagkakaganito.. Yan din ang dahilan bakit kami nag-away ng nobya mo! Did it satisfy you?? :mad::mad:" pagkatalikod ko he held my arm.. "Trix, d mo'ko dapat mahalin.. dahil.. dahil.." "Dahil may girlfriend ka na ganun bah?? don't worry Renz, i'll get over it! let your hand off my arm.. will you?" umalis na'ku dun.. di ku nga alam panu ako nakarating sa bahay namin.. [i]Renz POV GOD! what have iI done to her?? Bakit din ganito?? bakit nasasaktan ako nang makita ko siyang umiiyak?? bakit?? "Renz, you're out of your mind!" "Sorry Jane may iniisip lang ako.." "Sinong iniisip mo?? Si trixie?? yung malanding yun??" "Will you stop saying those things?" "Mula kanina dun sa parking lot after you've talked to her hindi ka na nagsasalita!" "Im sorry!" "Andito na tayo sa tapat ng gate nyu.." "OO alam ko.. k bye! Pupunta ako sa school nyo one of these days.. Humanda yang Trixie na yan!" "Good night babe.. forget about what happened tonight.. Be friends with Trixie.. Please.." "No way.. Oh ciah baba na'ko!" Hindi ko talaga alam bakit ako ganito.. I need to talk to Trixie tomorrow about evrything.. I need to apologize to her.. But anu bang dapat kung i.apologize?? Waaahhh.. Naguguluhan na'kO![/i] ON THE SCHOOL I need to freshen up my mind.. Be back to normal Trix.. Kaya mo yan.. You need to look blooming and pretty as always.. ;) pagdating ko sa school nakita ko na sina Renz at mga ktropa ko, they're all look so happy.. ano ba gagawin ko?? papasok ba;ko?? o hindi! Lord help me naman.. Kasalanan kasi tu ni cupido eh.. :D
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Re: hi everyone, this is my very first time writing a story.. criticisms, suggestions, comments are highly appreciated! im hoping you'll enjoy reading my story! [align=center][u][b]someday you'll be mine

nice!w8 for da nxt chapie..
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Re: hi everyone, this is my very first time writing a story.. criticisms, suggestions, comments are highly appreciated! im hoping you'll enjoy reading my story! [align=center][u][b]someday you'll be mine

aiee! nag'update si sis! :) next na!
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Re: hi everyone, this is my very first time writing a story.. criticisms, suggestions, comments are highly appreciated! im hoping you'll enjoy reading my story! [align=center][u][b]someday you'll be mine

new reader here .;) nxt naa sis. :D
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hala'...update na sis..!!... love this.... :):):)
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Re: hi everyone, this is my very first time writing a story.. criticisms, suggestions, comments are highly appreciated! im hoping you'll enjoy reading my story! [align=center][u][b]someday you'll be mine

yihee. naun ku lang nabasa to! haha! i'll support this! next naa sis!;] :penguin:
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